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Cigarette smoke
and sand,
an aroma?
that encases me
it's all I've ever smelt
Gentle waves
nuzzling
the creaky-soggy wood
of the wharf with
a sigh
of pleasure
it's all I've ever heard
Moonlight falling
pure
-r than ivory
softly stroking
soft cheeks
white
like soap
it's all I've ever seen
Skin
so warm
so warmly smooth
gracefully
yielding to
restlessly
curious fingers
skin
worn like lingerie
a milky, silky slip
over bones and body
it's all I've ever felt.
©2006-2009 ~NewYorkDetective
:iconnewyorkdetective:

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Idunno what to say.. its about being intimate at night on the beach.

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:iconbloodwitness:
Nice...but it would help to have some spaces somewhere. Where are the stanzas?!
:iconnewyorkdetective:
I kinda wanted it all together, to just give the feel of it's all happening at once, all adding to each other... dunno if that was a good idea after all?
:iconbloodwitness:
I dunno. Seemed kinda confusing.

Maybe bigger paragraphs to accent these...BIG ideas?
:iconnewyorkdetective:
Maybe.

or maybe I just should have spaced them lol

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